Illuminated Shower Head

I wrote this early look at art. one that intrigues you enough that I finish it?

Autumn Leaves Millas I

She shed leaves in the basket with sad eyes, sister and friend looking on. Sunset wet sky with orange and yellow make a silhouette of things before it. Mary's little face looked down and took an apple. The sadness in his eyes something of what had happened and not come back next summer ...


Hughes April Love Arthur

She clasped her thin shawl to his collar, his heart skipping beats. Was she excited? Was she afraid? She was not. The moon lit up the light body and lit her dress and porcelain skin. Turn the head, she looked down and saw the petals strewn on the ground. Ten years, she knew that her heart stopped for ...


The Milkmaid Vermeer

She looked down on the milk flow. A distant thought in his mind, distracted, she stopped the flow white with his finger licking. The sun was warm and pour into the barred window. While the woman looked out.

After the shower, Grimshaw

The street was wet and she walked long and slow in its rollers. I walked a distance behind her. I do not know who she was and who I am does not matter. The light shone on the moon stone all around us and the promise of heat and drought shone a house before us.

"Little Mary's face looked down and took an apple." His face pressed an apple? Whoaa-hand side!
"The point on the moon seen" uu
"While the woman looked out." What happened if she had the air?
"I do not know who she was and who I am does not matter." If you say that this person does nothing, I agree with you.

I do not know if I want to know one of these suites. The emotions for each of them seemed to be the same for me, too.

After the shower is the most interesting. It was the scene, you can see there is already character development with reference to "that I am not important." And what is the heat and drought, where is he getting? It passage very good and I think you should finish the last.

To be honest, I think you should finish each of them and make a book of short stories. Or at least combine them somehow and make a good story. I can not choose one over another.


PS This is like begging, but you play a clip from a story I'm writing? The question is: can you read this please? I need anyone and everyone's help.?
Please and thank you.

Arthur Hughes April Love

After showering, btw, your brilliant writer.